Hello readers. This Friday has been very busy. My teacher set out tasks out to the class called disconnect Fridays. there were lots of tasks such as build your own lego garden, write a short tale of a creature, and many more. I wrote a short tale of a mythical creature that I made up. I hope you enjoy it!
I was in the woods looking for my friend that had been lost while we were playing hide and seek. I followed a footprint trail thinking it was his. About 10 minutes later, I saw something that looked like slime. But I kept looking. Then I heard screaming. I ran as fast as could to where the screaming was. I ended up at a large goopy swamp. I then heard the screaming again, but this time it was in the swamp. So I decided to jump into the swamp to save my friend. Then I saw a huge figure coming at me. It was some sort of slime monster. Then I realized that it was the mythical creature Acid-ooze. If you touch it slime you will melt because it's made out of acid. The huge monster jumped on me and I started to melt. This is why you should never go into swamps...
Kia ora Liam,
ReplyDeleteAcid-ooze! Ekkk. I really enjoyed your story because you have used a variety of sentence structures. I wonder if you can include a simile and metaphor next time?
Keep writing! Your ideas are fantastic.
Looking forward to the next post,
Miss Laxa
Intresting creature
ReplyDeletei love your blog but I am looking forward for more blogs
ReplyDeletehi liam,
ReplyDeleteI like your story and at the end it made me laugh and nice blog looking forward for you future blogs
Hey Liam!
ReplyDeleteThat was a freaky story.. I hope you have learnt a lesson mot to play in the forest that have goopy swamps!
Could you include a picture of it? So that if I ever see it I know to run.. well fast walk away from it lol
Great imagination!
FROM MRS A @ NWS
ReplyDeleteIt is Chinese Language Week so...
Ni Hao (Hello) Liam
I liked how you included an Introduction in your blog and how you came to write a story about a mythical creature. I think I will stay away from playing in the woods.
I wonder if by proof reading you could come up with different words to use instead of the word "then" in some of your sentences.
I look forward to reading your next blog Liam.
Zhanshi zaijian (Bye for now)
From Mrs A
Kia ora Liam,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you describe the swamp. It makes me feel like I am actually there.Maybe next time you could try a more interesting greeting. I can't wait to see more of your awesome blog posts.
Hi liam,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading you're story,
Did you have fun doing it?
Was there a task board?
I laos like how you made it a very interesting story.
Keep up the good work!
wow what a great story. If that was real I would never ever go to a swamp
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